a paper boat
made from early drafts
of my poem
sails down the river ...
moonlit memories
Version II:
a paper boat
made from early drafts
of my poem
sails down the river
of moonlit memories
Version III:
a paper boat
made from early drafts
of my poem
sails down the river ...
of moonlit memories
NeverEnding Story, July 31, 2013
Note: There are three different river images in the tanka above: realist, metaphoric, and realist cum metaphoric (in the stream of consciousness). In Version III, the prepositional phrase in L5 is mainly used to disrupt the reader’s expectation, making the spatiotemporal shift.
