Chen-ou Liu's Translation Project: First English-Chinese Haiku and Tanka Blog

Sunday, December 22, 2019

Remnants of Darkness Tanka

winter sun 
scatters the remnants
of darkness
my way home seems
longer and lonelier

Tanka Origins, 1, 2019

Editor's Commentary: Another wonderful visual tanka (lines one through three) from Chen-ou, becoming a statement tanka in lines four and five. Only an experienced writer can accomplish this correctly. Not as easy as it sounds, because the first part must be deeply enhanced by the second part. The final line with the words “longer and lonelier” accomplishes this, and also provides us with “l” sounds that will linger beyond the read...